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05 July 2006 @ 03:13 pm
 
Title: Slippery Handholds
Fandom: Red Dwarf.
Word Count: 100 exactly.
Prompt: Ocean [1]
Spoilers for Dimension Jump.

For those unfamiliar with the situation, and for those who haven't seen Red Dwarf, here's a summary. It's a spoiler-free as I could make it, but it was really, really hard to avoid that. Go ahead and read if you're going to read the drabble.

The Starbug has crashed on an ocean planet (They haven't sunk, though. Yay for random rocky islands!), and to repair a vital machine, (I can't remember which one right now.) they have to go outside the ship to fix it. (And there's a raging ocean lashing at the spaceship...) Ace is not a regular crew member, (He's an alterate Rimmer.) but he's here to help. Oh, and his arm is broken. go figure. Anyway, he's helping Lister repair the vital machine. Drabble starts here.

I'm sure someone will drop in and tell me that I did it wrong, but I haven't seen DJ in a while...


And the drabble itself.

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The spray from the ocean knocks him off of his feet, and the rails are slippery, so he grabs at Ace for support,

But before he can get a good grasp he’s hanging for his life by the rails, and Ace is offering his arm as a handhold, and Lister knows that something is wrong with that arm, but before he can protest he’s up and supporting Ace through his own blackout.

It’s dangerous out here, but the repairs have to be made, and Lister needs to stop and think about this Rimmer, but-

Ace is asking for his help.

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And yes, I'll be using this at drabbles100. My prompt Tables.
 
 
 
Louisquiet_thoughts on July 5th, 2006 10:36 pm (UTC)
I like this, a lot of impact for 100 words!

Should there be an elipsis or dash after "but"?
Zekkass: Better replacementzekkass on July 5th, 2006 10:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

No. I intentionally wrote it like that. I can see your unsaid point, though, so I'll add one.
Someone, somewhere: rimmerkrzcowzgomoo on July 6th, 2006 12:59 am (UTC)
Whoa. Deep, man.
Zekkass: million yearszekkass on July 6th, 2006 01:20 am (UTC)
That scene always scared me a bit. I know Ace was being heroic and all, but I worried about him. (Broken arms always scare me a bit. Don't ask why.)
rhymes with "papaya"justwallpaper on July 6th, 2006 03:47 pm (UTC)
Aw. :D

Nice job! (Again, kudos for the exactly-100.)
Zekkass: courtingzekkass on July 6th, 2006 04:02 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

(Drabbles are my specialty. I have trouble with longer fics, actually. ^_^;)
Rare Benedictine: Frenchboyrarebenedictine on July 8th, 2006 03:54 pm (UTC)
Augh. That's rather frightening. Poor Ace with his broken arm. :\

Once again, a great job writing so much in so few words! I can imagine the whole scene (even though I have no idea what the characters look like... XD).
Zekkass: Fascinatingzekkass on July 8th, 2006 04:47 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

Since you don't know what they look like, here's some image links.

Ace.
Lister.
Ace fainting during the repair job.

I'm trying to write these so I don't confuse non-RD fans too easily, but I'm not always sucessful. It's good to here that this one worked. Thank you!